Stepdads are centipedes I’m at my worst when I’m like my stepfathers I got two of them my mom’s ex and her current beau sometimes I say shit like “Good deal.” or “Ok, chief” shit I learned from them it makes me sick to my stomach when I repeat their fucking phrases they’re in my pores these people that were never even meant to be in my life these holes of shit I have become them
Just gonna keep revising till I get this right. Posted my first revision. Not real happy with it but maybe it works. I dunno. Such is art.
My 2 cents (prolly another stepdad phrase ) you could end this at "Shit I learned from them". For me everything below that is the same thing said differently.
Pretty powerful. I wonder if you could end with this stanza? it punched me they’re in my pores these people that were never even meant to be in my life
